2009一年级11班英语作文中出现的错句与改正

作文题目：1.What I Do on Weekly Saturday Outing 2. My Dream

their talent to the human being. 纠正：others 前加and。/Travel all kinds of countries: 纠正：travel后加to

1.132.5梁英豪：I wish next weekly Saturdsay outing come to

5.125.5冀烨：Make my parents be proud of me. I put my heart

in study as nothing happens. 纠正:去掉be/as nothing happens—as if nothing has happened （make宾语+宾补结构错误；as, as if混合错误）Sept.23: I haven't have a certain objective yet. 纠正：I haven't had a certain objective yet. （完成时错误）

us early. 纠正: come前加to （祝愿句式错误）Sept.23: For example, someone’s dream is that

working as a teacher, but someone also wants to be a doctor. I plan that before 45 years old making some grades in science. 纠正: that去掉；someone后加else’s; also去掉; that去掉；making—to make;

6.128王京京：So I went to the library firstly; we ate some

grades—achievements （that用法错误；不定代词别人的表达错误；不定式表目的错误）

2.118.5胡首鹏： In Saturday afternoon as usually we can go

food and drinked some cola; we were surprised; we saw two old men playing chess and their faces were very strict; 纠正: So I went to the library first, ate some food, and drank） some cola. Later, we were

out do something we like。Sept.23: I will look after each people who has illness. 纠正：people--person

3.128.5李亚鑫：When the final bell goes off, I stand up at

surprised to see two old men playing chess with serious expressions. （连续动作表达法错误）Sept.23: The world is facing with hardships and challenges. I will raise much money for the poor, the sick man, and the disable. 纠正: facing-faced; the sick man—the sick; disable—disabled （动词固定表达法错误；the加形容词指一类人）

7.125关凯彬：It makes me feel relaxing. I walk out school. I

once. The street is very crowed and noisey ; 纠正: final去掉， the bell后加announcing the end of the class/goes--went/ stand—stood/is—was （汉语习惯影响错误；动词时态错误）The people who have dreams are beautiful. The life that is filled with dreams is colorful. 纠正: the people-the去掉；the

go to bookshop. 纠正：relaxing-relaxed; out后加of; bookshop前加a（ing与ed形容词用法错误；动词

life-the去掉 （有定语表泛指的用法错误）

介词及名词介词搭配错误）Sept: They can make

4.123周高磊：among the 7 days of week. Sept. 23 Some

people want to be rich, some people hope to have a happy family, others prefer to make contribution of

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people happier and convenient. 纠正:and后加their life （convenient用法错误）

8.108.5苗俊杰：The price of things also be very cheap. We all

come true. There is a saying \

way.

11.128姜琳琳：I go to snack street. There are many delicious

food. I like river. Sept.23: I should keep informed. 纠正: keep后加well

12.112陈垟阳：People could know lots of important news by

are very happy. 纠正：We are all very happy that the prices of goods are also very low. (便宜表达法错误；欠缺英语句式思维) Sept.23 A person have different dreams at different age. /The dream was I wanted to be the richest man in the world.Now, I have also a dream, it’s to be a doctor when I grow up. 纠正：have—has/was后加that/it—which （动词单复数错误；it与which用

me. 纠正：through me. /As a reporter is my dream, I think my dream can come true one day. 纠正：Being a reporter is my dream. I think my dream will come true one

13.117王璐璐：I got a lot of happy from them. It was tired.

（好的句子）I got over it. It’s my favorite sports.

法错误）

9.120王俊燕：I’m waiting the next weekly Saturday outing. 纠正:

waiting—expeting, the 去掉 （心中的等待和动作等待用法）

These were all the things I have done during my

weekly Saturday outing, so that we can study happy. 纠正: happy-happiness;tired—tiring; sports—sport; were-are; happy-happily （形容词

I’m waiting the next weekly Saturday outing. 纠正:

与名词用法错误；过去分词与现在分词用法错误；

waiting—expeting, the 去掉 （心中的等待和动作等

名词单复数错误；时态错误；形容词副词错误）Sept:

待用法）to personal纠正: habits—habit/ has-have/there

We have no much times. 纠正：We have not much

is; personal—myself. （存在句型错用）Sept.23: He will lose the direction that guiding people success. In

the other hand, there was no TV, computer and car without science.纠正: that去掉；success前加to; there was—there woul be; and car-or car （that错用；介词用法错误；虚拟语气用法错误；否定词并列连词用法错误）

10.114黄典哲：I had to go back to classroom. Sept.23: I think

time. （no与not用法错误）

14.128张隆基：By the end of we left there, we bought some

useful books. We also had some schoolwork need to be

finished. Sept.23: I have dreamed of becoming a richer, a scientist, a useful people and so on. 纠正：I have dreamed of becoming a rich man, a scientist, a useful person and son on.

15.117程萌萌：I went with my friend went to the other high

my dreams can come true, there is a saying \will, there is a way.\纠正：I think my dreams can

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school to saw my classmate. I didn't find him, he may go out I felt very sad. Sept.23: I want to go to Beijing to across the Great Wall. 纠正: across--see

16.116姚佳佳：We eat dumplings, they are very delicious. 时用法）Sept.23: I wanted to a great hero. But I don’t want to be it now. 纠正: it-one （one与it用法错误）

22.122.5张莹莹：write my exercises and draw picture. Sept.23:

Sept.23 I like help others./I also want to be an actor 纠正：help-helping/actor-actress

17.119黄君轲：独句Because I think they are difficult for me;

I think it can come true someday. 纠正: can-will; someday—some day

23.107孙德方

24.113.5穆德乐Because we can listening music. Sept.23: I

We talked about something they interested

18.118.5菅梦林：The afternoon belong to me. Sept.23: In

spite of the dream is different to come true, 纠正: In spite of—Though; come true-realize

19.135.5吕鹏恺：That are the things what I do during my

hate take the medicine. 纠正: take the--taking

25.120.5贾仕豪：in Saturday afternoon, I swimmed in the big

weekly.Sept.23: The most important reason is my grandpa was died of bad illness. 纠正：is后加that; was去掉

20.95焦玉茹：I had a interesting; it spend an hour, I have

river. I backed with my father. 纠正：in—on; swimmed—swam；backed—returned （某天的上下午晚上介词用法错误；不规则动词用法错误；动词错用）Sept.23: If I want my dream come true, I have to work hard from now. 纠正：If I want my dream to come true...（want动词的宾语和宾补用法错误）

26.117.5郭要创：Although today is tired, but I feel very

many clothes need to be washed; Looked at the time, I had an hour Poor grammar纠正：I had an interest. It took an hour. I have many clothes that need to be

washed. Looking at the time, I had an hour left. （interest不同形式用法错误；花费用法错误；谓语动词与非谓语动词用法错误）Sept.23: I am a responsible citizen, I can use courage, enthusiasm, and love make my country strong. 纠正：As I am a responsible citizen, I can use courage, enthusiasm, and love to make my country strong. (单句与主从句用法错误；未用不定式表目的)

21.105史帅举：I bought a piece of newspapers; I hoped

happy because it made me relaxing. Sept.23: I will take my family travel around the world. 纠正：travel前加to /I believe I must can come true my dream. 纠正：must can 改为will。 my dream will come true.

27.119.5栗亚芳：during the two and half hours; We live on

the sixth floor, usually has no water. I went out to buy some thing to use. 纠正：half前加a; usually前加and,

Saturday come soon 纠正: piece—copy;

I前加So （逻辑思维错误）Sept.23: I’ll go on my study

newspapers—newspaper / I hoped Saturday would come soon. （一份报纸与一种报纸区别；过去将来

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if I have a chance after university. 纠正：on后加with; after后加graduating from（动词短语介词搭配错误）

28.114吴玥瑾：We have a outing to do ourself's things; the

30.115.5朱亚静：Reading is a good habits; I has no time to do

that; I wish there is more time that belongs 31.116关梦哲：in every Saturday afternoon; do some

personal thing. Such as go shopping; we came back school. We went to classroom; on last Saturday纠正: in—on; thing-things, for example, going shopping.

After we came back to school, we went to our classroom last Saturday. （逻辑思维表达错误）Sept.23: I hoped I can fly So that I can fly around the world to see beautiful sights. Every one all have their own dream.纠正：I hoped I could fly so that I could fly

first, we buy ourselves's own things; we go to the bookstore to look the books, 省略号的用法; we will rleturn school; 纠正: We had an outing to do our own things. First, we bought things for our daily use.

Then we went into a bookstore to look through the books. /省略号…/we would return to school. （动词过去时用法错误；动作排序错误）Sept.23: It doesn’t only my thinks but also my family’s thinks. My family wants me to become a doctor as my aunt.纠正: doesn’t—isn’t;

thinks—idea;

thinks-thinking;

around the word to see beautiful sights. I am sure that I must became a singer./Every one—Everyone; have—has; dream—dreams; must became—will become （逻辑思维表达错误）Sept.23: There is one dream I would like to come true best. I will keep working for making money. 纠正: to后加make;

wants-want; as—like （动词与名词用法错误；助动词用法错误）

best-most. / for making—to make （最想与最喜欢用

29.113扬亚明：I would like to go bookshop and read

法错误；实现come true与realize的用法错误）

interesting book; I may be walk along the center street; This is my action on every Saturday afternoon

in纠正: Because--,because./they后加were. （从句

纠正: go后加to the; book-books/ may be改为 may

单独成句错误；句子缺谓语）Sept.23: This must

或者Maybe放前面；center street—main street. /This

come true. 纠正: must-will （汉语影响错误）

is my action—Those are my activities. （名词的特指

32.120.5王帅举 错误；maybe与may的用法；action与activites用

33.104.5赵佳磊: Luckily, my school allowed us to have a

法错误）Sept.23: The healthy body is my premise to work

hard

for

my

success.

纠

正

:

premise—precondition （结论的前提与做事情的前提的区别）

Saturday afternoon off to have a rest. I saw a lot of students doing what they want to do, for example, Some students played basket at playground, others went shopping like me. We found many books on shelives, 纠正: allowed-allows; （时态都变成一般时）want to do中的do去掉；at—on the; went—go; shelives—shelves （一般时用法错误；背诵功底太

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