英语小作文

My Dream

I am a handsome boyl. My name is Mike.

I like drawing. My dream is to have a white house with a white wall, a white roof, a white floor.

I can draw a red car on the wall, and I can drive the car around the world. I can draw a plane on the roof, and I want to take the plane to the sky. i can draw a sailing-boat on the floor, and I want to take the sailing-boat across the sea.

点评台:这篇作文\Dream\，形式新颖，风格独特，用词得当，语句通顺。此文章充分地体现了小作者丰富的想象力和较强的写作能力，是一篇成功的文章。同时，希望张灿小朋友能坚持练习英文写作，相信你一定会写出更好的英语作文。\good!\。

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My English Teacher

Miss Shan is my English teacher. She has two big eyes. She is thin and short. Her hair is very long. She is very beautiful. Her English is very good. She always play games with us in English class. So her class is very interesting and shi is kind to us. She like us and we like her too. I like my English teacher. How about you?

点评中心: 文章写得比较简单,词语使用准确, 语言朴实无华,字里行间表达了小作者对英语老师的喜爱之情, 但不够具体, 如果能指出老师的爱好、习惯等，文章会更加充实，希望你继续努力,写出更加优秀的文章来。

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My Family

I have a happy family. There are six people in my family. They are grandpa, grandma, father, mother, elder sister and I.

My name is Yang Yuan. I am a pupil, I'm in Grade 5. I like English very much, I read them every morning. I often listen to the English tape. My grandpa is an accountant(会计). He is very busy. My grandma is a farmer. She does the housework. My mother is a farmer, too. She cooks every day. My father is a worker. In the evening he likes watching TV. While he is watching TV, he often tells us not to talk. My elder sister is a middle school student, she isn't good at English, but she likes maths very much.

All of them love me, and I love them, too. I have a happy family. I love my family.

点评中心:这篇文章主要描写了家庭成员的职业，My Family更适合做这篇文章的标题，整篇文章条理清楚，语言简练，用词准确，没有语法错误，可见小作者的英语语言基本功很好，希望杨园同学在今后的学习中继续发扬这个优点，不要骄傲，写出更多的好文章。文章级别:B。

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My Family

Hello, everyone! Today I am going to talk about my family. My name is Mike.

I am in Class 1, Grade 4. l like English very much. I like hamburgers. I have a happy family. There are three people in my family. Look, this is my father. He has two brown eyes, a big nose and a small mouth. He is an engineer. He is very handsome. Look, that is my mother. She has two big eyes. She is an engineer too. She is very pretty and kind.

My family is not big, but we have many friends. We are happy. I love them very much and they love me too.

讲评中心：文章写得比较简炼，词语使用准确，语言生动，字里行间表达了小作者对家人的爱。但不要骄傲，继续努力啊！文章级别：A。

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