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3．I took part in the meeting，which was held in Beijing last Friday.It was very instructive，which was hosted by a manager who came to our company yesterday.

→I took part in the meeting held_in_Beijing last Friday.It was very instructive，which was hosted by a manager coming_to_our_company yesterday.

4．Mother went to work in a hurry，and she didn’t have breakfast.She was as busy as a bee these days and came back home very late.

→Mother went to work in a hurry without_having_breakfast.She was as busy as a bee these days，coming_back_home_very_late.

三、运用非谓语动词转换短文(根据一般表达写出该短文的高级表达)

北京市有大量的出租车司机，他们每天全心全意地为乘客服务，为北京市的交通发挥着重要作用。他们起早贪黑，赚钱养家糊口。有一次，我下车时不小心把手机忘在了车上，但当我和司机同志联系上之后，他立即开车把手机送到了我家门口，让我感动不已。

一般表达：

There are a large number of taxi drivers in Beijing.They serve passengers heart and soul.They play an important part in the traffic of Beijing.They make some money.They work from dawn till night.One day，I left my cellphone in the taxi I took.I got in touch with the driver.He drove to my home and gave it back to me.I was very excited.

高级表达：

There are a large number of taxi drivers in Beijing，serving passengers heart and soul and playing an important part in the traffic of Beijing.In order to make some money to support their families，they work from dawn till night.One day，I got out of the taxi in a hurry with my cellphone left in the taxi I took.On hearing what had happened，the taxi driver drove to my home as fast as possible and gave the cellphone back to me.Seeing my cellphone again，I was too excited to say a word.

[练一练] 运用非谓语动词转换短文

大城市里高楼大厦林立，房价越来越高。一方面，很多人无房居住，另一方面，大量房子却卖不出去。不少人即使买了一套住房，恐怕也要一辈子辛辛苦苦工作来还银行贷款。我们希望政府采取措施，关心这些收入不高的人群。

一般表达：

There are more and more tall buildings in big cities.Their prices are going up day by day.On one hand，there are still lots of people.They have no houses to live in.On the other hand，many apartments are hard to be sold out.Even if you buy an apartment，I’m afraid you have to pay off the money you borrow from the bank.You

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will work hard day and night all your life.I do hope our government take strong measures to solve the housing problem and take care of the people.Their incomes are low.

高级表达：

There are more and more tall buildings in big cities，with their prices going up day by day.On one hand，there are still lots of people having no houses to live in.On the other hand，many apartments are hard to be sold out.Even if you have bought an apartment，I’m afraid you have to try to pay off the money borrowed from the bank，working hard day and night all your life.I do hope our government can take strong measures to solve the housing problem，showing great concern for the people whose incomes are not high enough.

第四课时 如何运用高级词汇与高级句式

写作时，“高级词汇与高级句式”如能运用贴切自然，哪怕整篇文章只用上一两处，也会为你的作文增添色彩。

一、使用高级词汇 1．标新立异

写作时要恰当得体地使用一些蕴含感情色彩，别人有可能想不到的词汇，恰当地求新求异。

As far as I’m concerned，parents’ much protection will do more harm than good to children’s future development.

→As far as I’m concerned，parents’ limitless protection will do more harm than good to children’s future development.(2013·福建卷满分作文)

I received your email last week，but I am busy preparing for my final exam，which is important for me，so I didn’t reply to you without delay.

→I received your email last week，but I am busy preparing for my final exam，which is vital for me，so I didn’t reply to you without delay.(2013·山东卷满分作文)

2．短语优先

多使用词组、习语来代替一些单词，以增加文采。

To achieve one’s dream，one must try to equip oneself with rich knowledge and set a goal easy to reach.

→To achieve one’s dream，one must make great efforts to equip oneself with rich knowledge and set a goal easy to reach.(2013·北京卷满分作文)

What’s more，we can pour out the troubles we face，and release our pressure

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from different aspects.

→What’s more，we can pour out the troubles we are faced with，and release our pressure from different aspects.(2013·重庆卷满分作文)

3．避免重复

尽量避免过多地使用某一个单词，必要时选择使用其他恰当的同义词或词组来代替。 I like reading while my brother likes watching football matches. →I like reading while my brother enjoys watching football matches. [练一练] 用较高级词汇代替加黑的词或短语。 1. We all have the same chance.

possess

2．We have a lot of homework to do at the weekend.

_endless

3．I can no longer bear the way he speaks to us.

put_up_with

4．He didn’t listen to what I said in the class.

turned_a_deaf_ear_to

5．We’ll try our best to develop the traditional friendship between us.

promote

6．The teacher directed the gifted students towards the more difficult courses.

challenging

二、使用高级句式，让句子靓起来 1．恰当使用被动语态

①We will have selected about thirty volunteers to the Mars throughout the world by 2015.

→About thirty volunteers will have been selected to the Mars throughout the world by 2015.(2013·广东卷书面表达)

②I’m delighted to know that the Shanghai Museum will organize a famous art exhibition and you are collecting opinions of the public as to select the location for the exhibition，which encouraged me to write to express my ideas.

→I’m delighted to know that a famous art exhibition will be organized by the Shanghai Museum and opinions of the public are being collected as to select the location for the exhibition，which encouraged me to write to express my ideas.(2013·上海卷满分作文)

2．使用强调句

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①As a saying goes，the little thing matters most.

→As a saying goes，it is the little thing that matters most.(2013·上海卷满分作文)

②Our parents have devoted their unconditional love to us，which indeed deserves our appreciation and reward

→It’s our parents who have devoted their unconditional love to us，which indeed deserves our appreciation and reward.(2013·重庆卷满分作文)

3．使用倒装句

①The children can grow up mentally and physically healthy only in this way. →Only in this way can the children grow up mentally and physically healthy.(2013·福建卷满分作文)

②I didn’t realize words could be powerful in both positive and negative ways until then.

→Not until then did I realize words could be powerful in both positive and negative ways.(2013·湖北卷短文写作)

4．使用省略句

①If it is so，I hope you will have a wonderful time.

→If so，I hope you will have a wonderful time.(2013·山东卷满分作文) ②Although they were faced with many problems，they didn’t lose heart. →Although faced with many problems，they didn’t lose heart. 5．使用感叹句

It is a very splendid moment.

→How splendid a moment it is！(2013·辽宁卷满分作文) I am very worried about his condition.

→How worried I am about his condition.(2013·湖北卷满分作文) 6．使用with复合结构

①His mother is paving the ways for him while his father is holding his jacket behind him，and we can see sweat on his face.

→His mother is paving the ways for him while his father is holding his jacket behind him，with sweat on his face.(2013·福建卷满分作文)

②As the society develops rapidly，it’s necessary for us to have a good knowledge of English and computer.

→With the society developing rapidly，it’s necessary for us to have a good knowledge of English and computer.

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