雅思真题剑1到剑7的大作文的范文解析大漠版的，精华啊，整理得好辛苦

However, if there are different kinds of happiness for different individuals that the first step in achieving it would be to have a degree of self-knowledge.

However 转折，指出该段的主旨句， 回到题目第二问‘what factors’, first step是自知之明（self-knowledge）

If 从句明表条件，是为因果

A person needs to know who he or she is before being able to know what it is that makes him or her happy.

进一步说明什么是self-knowledge, 就是幸福对他代表什么（如金钱，美女，权利等等） 第三段 Of course, factors such as loving relationships, good health, the skills to earn a living and a peaceful environment all contribute to our happiness too.

一个factors 把第一段的幸福含义又搬出来了，其实幸福定义在很多程度上和幸福影响因素是一码事，比如我认为有钱就幸福，那么金钱就是幸福的影响因素。

爱 loving relationships 健康good health 谋生能力the skills to earn a living 平和环境 a peaceful environment 四个因素没有严格的分类 影响因素+ contribute to + 影响结果，这个句型很重要，如The IELTS score contributes to my application 雅思分数影响我的申请，想必大家能共鸣吧。

But this does not mean that people without these conditions cannot be happy. 这句有哲理，我就想不出来，健康等是幸福的既非充分又非必要条件 Cannot 必须这要写，can not是错误的，切记 第四段

Overall, I think an ability to keep clear perspective in life is a more essential factor in achieving happiness.

essential factor继上一个first step之后，粉墨登场了。提醒一下，英文按逻辑重要性，是把最重要的放在最后，中文中叫“压轴戏”

overall 评注性句子状语，大家还有印象吧

perspective [c] 观点，看法 view, opinion 这个词很常用，也有点高级，记住它

By that I mean an ability to have a clear sense of what is important in our lives (the welfare of our families, the quality of our relationships, making other people happy, etc.) and what is not (a problem at work, getting annoyed about trivial things, etc.). 继续解释perspective, by that 把上下句联系起来，that 指代上句。 Welfare / wellbeing [u] 幸福

etc. 等等，拉丁文， 记住末尾那个点别给弄没了，近义词 and so on 第五段

Like self-awareness, this is also very difficult to achieve, but I think these are the two factors that may be most important for achieving happiness 这种写法叫做先抑后扬

Self-awareness对应 self-knowledge

Two factors 对应self-knowledge 或 clear perspective 还原作者写作流程 审题

先看第一问‘why is it very difficult to define?’这好说，幸福难定义吗，就是一个人一个答案；再看下文‘what factors are important in achieving happiness?’转换成‘how can you achieve happiness?’就好理解了，至于到个人如何获得幸福，首先得有自知之名，最重要的是你怎么看待幸福，记得《读者》上有一句话：“认为自己最幸福的人，他就是幸福的人；认为自己最聪明的人，其实是最愚蠢的人。”（这句有点扯了，老外应该不看《读者》） 框架

第一段：开门见山，第一段就是“happiness is very difficult to define, because?”,连背景都不介绍了，“Everyone, who spares nothing to pursue his or her own happy life, has yet to reach the consensus over the definition of happiness.”也省去了，省得考官说我是模版。总分模式介绍为什么答案各异，幸福含义分为世俗（secular world）和精神的（spiritual world）；有将世俗的分为物质的(material)和人际关系的(relationships)

第二段：指出how to achieve happiness 第一步first step是self-knowledge。与上段如何过渡得好好考虑考虑，那就说幸福对每个人而言是不同的，但单就某个人而言，他要获取幸福，就首先得有自知之明，然后再解释为什么需要自知之明。

第三段：我还打算谈获取信服最重要的是如何看待人生，这是个压箱底的好货，我得先卖个关子，那么这段就谈那些常见的影响幸福的因素是其中是既非充分又非必要条件。

第四段：关子买完了，那就“图穷匕首现”了，本段总分格式，overall 总体说来，如何看待人生才是获取幸福的关键。然后解释，分清楚对你来说重要和不重要就可以了。 第五段：总结一下，自知之明和如何看待人生是获取幸福的法宝。 遣词造句

文中表达幸福的影响因素可够丰富的，整理一下说不定哪天能用上 Wealth and material success

Emotions and loving personal relationships Spiritual path Material world

Relationship with people Self-knowledge

Loving relationships Good health

The skills to earn to a living A peaceful environment Clear perspective

The welfare of our family

The quality of our relationships Making other people happy A problem at work

Getting annoyed about trivial things 如果是我？

这个题目，幸福为啥难定义什么？怎样获得幸福（题目原来意思为“获取幸福组重要的因素有哪些”）第一问好说，第二问，想了想，忽然想起当今社会伟大而无名的哲学家大漠炊烟了了（也就是本人，嘻嘻）说过的一句话：“做人做事归根到底其实就是一种心态”，其实跟考官一样，就是如何看待人生，看来伟大的思想家想法有时往往是一致的，哈哈。除此之外，还有啥呢，还有就是老说思辨能力（critical thinking）,重要懂得如何去思考。就这样了吧。 幸福在哪里？

记得遥远的童年，当年还算是祖国的花朵，戴着鲜艳的红领巾，背着崭新的书包，太阳照着我们红彤彤的小脸上。然后在老师的带领下，高声齐唱：“春天在哪里啊，春天在哪里，春天在那小朋友的眼睛里。”现在想起来，真是又傻又天真。

换到今天，你假如问我，“幸福在哪里？”我想了半天，终于得到了标准答案：“幸福就在新闻联播里。”在新闻联播里，人民公仆是清正廉洁的、警察是抓坏蛋的、人民生活水平是逐步提高的、老百姓是喜笑颜开的、美国人是想一门心思巴结我们的、维族汉族同胞是亲如一家人的、外面的世界是一塌糊涂的，一切的一切激起了我作为国家主人的一份子的骄傲（其实，基于我秉承雷锋精神的奉献精神，我是从小就立志当一名人民公仆，但是估计这辈子只有做主人的份了）。所以我特别反对很多人每天都看新闻联播，一边看一边骂的没素质的表现，因为我也有时看新闻，而且观看时候情绪很好（古话叫“笑而不语”），这种感觉就像小时候看《西游记》一样，时不时把自己融入戏中，自己能腾云驾雾，能七十二变，那种感觉很好；看新闻联播也一样，把自己融入新闻中，觉得自己过上了这种幸福的生活，所以看完之后，精神状态极好，连做雅思题都会多对两个，所以，我的结论是“我的幸福就在新闻联播里。”

品读剑桥B7T1 (1)

(2009-09-08 16:45:18)

It’s generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

The relative importance of natural talent and training is a frequent topic of discussion when people try to explain different levels of ability in, for example, sport, art or music.

Obviously, education systems are based on the belief that all children can effectively be taught to acquire different skills, including those associated with sport, art or music. So from our own school experience, we can find plenty of evidence to support the view that a child can acquire these skills with continued teaching and guided practice.

However, some people believe that innate talent is what differentiates a person who has been trained to play a sport or an instrument, from those who become good players. In other words, there is more to the skill than to a learned technique, and this extra talent cannot be taught, no matter how good the teacher or how frequent a child practices.

I personally think that some people do have talents that are probably inherited via their genes. Such talents can give individuals a facility for certain skills that allow them to excel, while more hard-working students never manage to reach a comparable level. But, as with all questions of nature versus nurture, they are not mutually exclusive. Good musicians or artists and exceptional sports starts have probably succeed because of both good training and natural talent. With the natural talent, continuous training would be neither attractive nor productive, and without the training, the child would not learn how to exploit and develop their talent.

In conclusion, I agree that any child can be taught particular skills, but to be really good in areas such as music, art or sport, then some natural talent is required.

品读雅思B7T1 (2)

(2009-09-08 16:55:55)

It’s generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

看到这个标题，就知道有个陷阱，这个是限定在sport和music 领域，所以得小心点，别踩着雷了 开头段

The relative importance of natural talent and training is a frequent topic of discussion when people try to explain different levels of ability in, for example, sport, art or music.

介绍背景，很俗很管用，句型 sth is a frequent topic of discussion when, 我们四六级书上就有 sth is a hot-debated topic 之类的，你不能说这个高级主考官也是背了那本作文书，套了那个模版吧。其实用不用模版无所谓，关键看合不合适，你拿姚明的西装给潘长江穿上肯定挺难看吧，你不能有此得出结论“千万不要给潘长江穿西装，可难看。” 主体一段

Obviously, education systems are based on the belief that all children can effectively be taught to acquire different skills, including those associated with sport, art or music. 这句也是为培养因素作背景说明，或者叫做原因吧 Obviously 评注性句子状语 The belief that 这个that 从句做belief的同位语，一些抽象意义词，如belief, view, thought, attitude 等常接that 做同位语，雅思作文经常用的，值得注意

skills, including those associated with sport, art or music 谈背景时也不忘扣紧主题，不跑离sport, art, music这几个领域

So from our own school experience, we can find plenty of evidence to support the view that a child can acquire these skills with continued teaching and guided practice.

So 引导结果状语，其实带了两个原因：the education system 和 from our experience

With continued teaching and guided practice; with+名词通常表示伴随、原因、条件或作定语，此处表示条件，如果持续的教导和指导性练习。注意此处continued teaching, guided practice 不是单纯的teaching and practice，添加修饰成分使表到具体生动 主体二段

However, some people believe that innate talent is what differentiates a person who has been trained to play a sport or an instrument, from those who become good players.

提出了talent支持的观点，

注意对应上段的表达支持观点的举行，

We can find plenty of evidence to support the view that Some people believe that

Differentiate A from those B 区别开来

Who has been trained to play a sport or an instrument play做动词

Who become good players player 作名词，可见，词性的变化一般会引起句型的改变，因此关键词词性改变，再组句，不失为句型多样化的一种方法，如，Usage of internet is very common. The internet is widely used. Usage [u], use [vt]

In other words, there is more to the skill than to a learned technique, and this extra talent cannot be taught, no matter how good the teacher or how frequent a child practices. In other words换句话说，同义表达

Talent skill technique 按天赋由大到小排序，其实一般情况下，skill常用，与technique 接近

No matter how good the teacher is or no matter how frequent a child practices, 其实这个is不该省略，no matter+ how/what/which, 表强调，不管怎样 主体三段

I personally think that some people do have talents that are probably inherited via their genes. 上两段一个谈了正反两方面观点，现在是作者观点了，I personally think 是标志成分，但这句并不是主旨句

Certainly/ surely 肯定 probably/possibly/maybe 也许 impossibly/out of the question/cannot 不可能 几个表达可能性的几组词很重要，阐明作者的看法，记住它们

Such talents can give individuals a facility for certain skills that allow them to excel, while more hard-working students never manage to reach a comparable level. While做为连词表示对照 看一下句型多样性

Certain skills allow them to excel

Hard-working student never manage to reach a comparable level

Facility [u,sing] 容易做好或学好某事物的能力，这和以前在学过facilities [pl] 设备，环境 不一样，have a facility for learning languages

Excel [vi] 大家都知道，不就是office电子表格吗，这里为其本意 超越 excel at/in

But, as with all questions of nature versus nurture, they are not mutually exclusive. 主旨句

Versus [prep] 大家应该很熟吧

Good musicians or artists and exceptional sports starts have probably succeed because of both good training and natural talent.

又出现probably, 但要强调 possible 可能，probably 很可能，impossible 不可能， improbably 很不可能 注意其细微区别

Without the natural talent, continuous training would be neither attractive nor productive, and without the training, the child would not learn how to exploit and develop their talent.

对上一句正面表述的反面表述，上一句：因为both training and talent, 所以succeed; 这一句： without talent, training 如何；without training, talent 不会exploit and develop。 而且用的是虚拟条件句。这种运用很常用，把一个道理先正面说，然后用否定的虚拟条件句反着说，表示强调，如：The Internet has brought many benefits to us. Without the Internet, we could not enjoy much convenience. 大家得好好体会，虚拟语气算高级句型哦，很多同学不就喜欢追求这个吗 结尾段

In conclusion, I agree that any child can be taught particular skills, but to be really good in areas such as music, art or sport, then some natural talent is required. I agree 结尾做总结，再次强调作者观点，中立，稍微偏talent 还原作者写作流程： 审题

看到这个题目，又是天赋和培养之间的关系，这种题肯定是态度中立，没办法，因为两种因素肯定是interact 相互影响，主体段分三段好写，主体一二段正反两方面观点，主体三段骑墙