On college students establishing their own business

Interesting first;

Should not affect the major classes; Arrange them properly; As much as possibly;

What electives to chose? It is a question indeed. I suppose many students hold the same question especially for some students who just join the campus. It is a fresh

environment for many freshmen who just join the campus come from the high school or from other university.

Before we have not so many choices due to the arrangement by the high school or the Education Bureau except Chinese, English and so on, but now we have to face many choices instantly coming.

So let us face the music. How to choose? Different people hold different opinion.

Some people think electives should be enjoyable due to they think already got too much pressure from compulsory course. So they prefer some funny courses, such as talk show, music and so on.

I think we should base on our personnel requirements when we make a choice,

according to me I think I will put the balance when I make a choice. I think we should pay attention to both physical and mental health.

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On college students’ establishing their own business

Now days there are have no so many right positions for every college students in China due to current economic crisis.

So the government encourage the college students to establish their own business due to the share some stressing for our government. And the other reason is we need all kinds developing factors for our country. Last but not the least; the young students hold the fresh ideas like a blank paper you can do any painting as you like.

Advantage of the students establishing their own business as follow: firstly, they are fresh blood for the society business world in China. Secondly, they master English very good special for some exports firms. Thirdly, they can put what they studied in college to practice directly.

Every coin has two sides. The disadvantages of the issue are as follow: they are

young people who just come from school they can not think twice on some issues and the other reason is they are almost idealists for every event.

As for me, I think they can try to establishing their own business but they have prepare the fulfill plans. Firstly, they have to put the best and worst end when they prepare the plans. Secondly, they can make a team when they want to carry out some plan---four eyes see more clearly than two. Last but not the least; they can try some small business for the beginning due to small ones ask less money.

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On college students’ establishing their own business

Now days there are have no so many right positions for every college students in China due to current economic crisis.

So the government encourage the college students to establish their own business due to the share some stressing for our government. And the other reason is we need all kinds developing factors for our country. Last but not the least; the young students hold the fresh ideas like a blank paper you can do any painting as you like.

Advantage of the students establishing their own business as follow: firstly, they are fresh blood for the society business world in China. Secondly, they master English very good special for some exports firms. Thirdly, they can put what they studied in college to practice directly.

Every coin has two sides. The disadvantages of the issue are as follow: they are young people who just come from school they can not think twice on some issues and the other reason is they are almost idealists for every event.

As for me, I think they can try to establishing their own business but they have prepare the fulfill plans. Firstly, they have to put the best and worst end when they prepare the plans. Secondly, they can make a team when they want to

carry out some plan---four eyes see more clearly than two. Last but not the least; they can try some small business for the beginning due to small ones ask less money. 字数:243 提交次数:1 显示: ? 作文评分 题目要求 80.5 ? 排名:第48(共95)，最高分:90，最低分:59 词汇: 句子: 篇章结构: 内容相关: 评语： 作者能较灵活准确地使用词汇表达，但学术词汇的积累还有很大的空间；采用了恰当的衔接手法，层次清晰；作者应适量增加从句的使用量 按句点评标签详解 第1段 1.1 Now days there are have no so many right positions for every college students in China due to current economic crisis. [修改] ? ? ? ?

第2段

[词语错误] 用词不当，now days是不是nowadays。 [动词错误] are have 疑似动词连用。

[动词错误] 语法错误，be have不规范，建议修改。

[搭配学习] 动名搭配 have...position 在教材中出现过 2215 次

2.1

So the government encourage the college students to establish their own business due to the share some stressing for our government. [修改]

? ? ? ? ? ? ?

[动词错误] 主谓不一致，建议将本句的谓语动词改为第三人称单数形式。 [其他] due to the share some在本族语中很少使用。

2.2

And the other reason is we need all kinds developing factors for our country. [修改]

[动词错误] 请检查is we need，确认动词用法正确。

[搭配学习] 动名搭配 develop...factor 在教材中出现过 5 次 [批改提示] country表示“国家”。注意与state的区别。详情点击 [批改提示] 查看and用于句首的用法。

[批改提示] reason表示“原因，理由”。注意与cause的区别。详情点击 2.3 Last but not the least; the young students hold the fresh ideas like a blank paper you can do any painting as you like. [修改] ? ? ?

第3段

[词语错误] 固定用法错误，建议将last but not the least改为last but not least。 [搭配学习] 动名搭配 do...paint 在教材中出现过 4 次 [搭配学习] 动名搭配 hold...idea 在教材中出现过 62 次

3.1

Advantage of the students establishing their own business as follow: firstly, they are fresh blood for the society business world in China. [修改]

? ? ?

[词语错误] 固定用法错误，建议将as follow改为as follows。 [其他] 请检查the society business world，本族语中很少使用。 [其他] 请检查as follow， 确认符合语法规范。

? ? ? ?

第4段

[其他] 确认are fresh blood for符合语法规范。 [其他] for the society business疑似冠词多余。

3.2

Secondly, they master English very good special for some exports firms. [修改]

[其他] 请检查some exports firms，本族语中很少使用。

3.3

Thirdly, they can put what they studied in college to practice directly. [修改]

[动词错误] 动词 put 后面很少接 wh-从句

4.1

Every coin has two sides. [修改]

4.2

The disadvantages of the issue are as follow: they are young people who just come from school they can not think twice on some issues and the other reason is they are almost idealists for every event. [修改]

? ? ? ? ?

第5段 [动词错误] 请检查is they are，确认动词用法正确。

[词语错误] 固定用法错误，建议将as follow改为as follows。 [其他] 请检查as follow， 确认符合语法规范。 [其他] 确认are almost idealists符合语法规范。

[批改提示] people表示“人，民族”。查看与person的区别。 5.1 As for me, I think they can try to establishing their own business but they have prepare the fulfill plans. [修改] ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ?

[动词错误] 语法错误，建议将try to doing改为try to do。 [动词错误] 请检查have prepare，确认have后面的用词正确。 [动词错误] 请检查try to establishing，确认动词用法正确。 [词语错误] 用词不当， the fulfill不规范，建议修改。 [其他] 请检查the fulfill plans， 确认符合语法规范。

5.2

Firstly, they have to put the best and worst end when they prepare the plans. [修改]

[搭配学习] 动名搭配 put...end 在教材中出现过 2919 次 [搭配学习] 动名搭配 prepare...plan 在教材中出现过 420 次 5.3 Secondly, they can make a team when they want to carry out some plan---four eyes see more clearly than two. [修改] [其他] 请检查some plan，注意名词数的一致性。 [批改提示] 查看clearly与clear的区别。

[搭配学习] 动名搭配 make...team 在教材中出现过 5112 次 [搭配学习] 动名搭配 carry...plan 在教材中出现过 691 次 5.4 Last but not the least; they can try some small business for the beginning due to small ones ask less money. [修改] [句子错误] 请检查ask，确认主谓一致。

[词语错误] 固定用法错误，建议将last but not the least改为last but not least。 [其他] 请检查some small business，注意名词数的一致性。 [搭配学习] 动名搭配 ask...money 在教材中出现过 31 次